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A health promotion model that can initiate behavioral changes is the family systems theory. This theory looks at the family rather than everyone within the unit. This theory looks at how each individual member affects the whole family as one. Behavioral changes come when a new member is added like a birth, when a loss has happened such as a death or when a member becomes sick and other members must pick up and carry forward with the daily duties. This model helps teach and promote health and behavioral changes by allowing the whole family to make the changes as one instead of individuals. From personal experience some barriers I have seen in the short time I have practiced being a nurse is cultural barriers, hearing or seeing impairments and the inability to read or understand what is being taught. Another big barrier is that as nurses we typically explain or give written instructions and do not use the patients learning preference when teaching important topics that these patients need to know to initiate behavioral changes. A patient’s or even a persons readiness and willingness I feel highly affect the learning outcomes because people will not learn if they do not feel the need or want to learn what is being taught and this will just make the nurse and patient both frustrated and eventually just give up all together.

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In all cases, nurses should teach and advise patients by promoting behavioral changes in their current lifestyles and encouraging them to reduce behaviors that could put them at risk and could cause illness or worsen chronic conditions. Nursing and other healthcare Together professionals can influence rising healthcare costs by promoting positive behavioral changes in patients and reduce dependence on the healthcare system (Edelman, Kudzma and